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It's mundane,
the soda aisle
and my wandering, walking up
then down. I frown to distract.
Look intense.
And buy the soda you love
because you might, you
might be here to have it. Though
with I need a drink.
I don't need a drink.

The same strength, faux-weak
ness that I will always have,
and tell myself I learned from you.
I buy it, afraid I won't like the taste,
or maybe I will and it'll be there
for a few days squishing along inside me.
It's just fucking soda, but it also means
I still love you.
I write more than once a year, but it is all bad. It was RC Cola.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2007-03-12
but it also means by ~altruisticlies is a walk flooded with memories of love past, and those feelings that still linger. ( Suggested by imperfect and Featured by coshdaddy )
Vesiculae Featured By Owner May 24, 2007
Goddamn it, YES.
taintedbliss Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2007  Hobbyist General Artist
rebekkah13 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
I don't know what else to say.
ItzaKookie Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
Simple is good. I like how you used few words, yet I can picture it so clearly in my mind. You are a truly talented writer.
Chuquita Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
Very nice work. :3
I luv RC soda but I rarely get a chance to have any.
xclockwork Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
Ohh. The last line is beautiful. It completely changes the mood of the entire piece.
beautifuloblivionxx Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
i love this. seriously.
zardorestinpeace Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
i like it a lot
hellhoundp2k Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007  Hobbyist Photographer
Ugh, I love it.
XXXfallenXangelXXX Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007   Writer
Gorgeous, hon. The whole of is 'cut' perfectly and the emotion in it is great. Oddly enough I think along the same lines of this everytime I pick up a can of pepsi. Good memories always follow pepsi's :3 Well, anywho, dahling, awesome work :D
oasis3-16 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
Aww... this is so good!! :+fav:
AuroraDark Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007  Hobbyist Digital Artist
The poem is very good with its description of the curious relationship between a person and soda :P, but the "love" connection at the last lines seemed to come out of nowhere. I didn't associate "from you" as being a direct connection to any kind of love story, so I don't feel that the "I still love you" is completely justified/explained.

Interesting comparison nonetheless, though.
rasiqra Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
it feels so honest, almost matter-of-fact..and it touches me deeply.
theheathering Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007's so sad!u.u....but i love that i can relate^^ you had a great idea goin'^^
SelphieAngel395 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
very nice. A bittersweet taste to it, raw and beautiful. It mirrors my heart, and I'm sure many more. :blowkiss"
scherzando Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
The soda aisle is mundane? That's what I get from the first part only because that is before your walking up and down.

I dunno if you meant both are mundane or just your walking up and down?
4eva-me Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
i really love this poem and im going through the exact same thing!!!!
AbstractEpiphany Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
Heh, I really like this poem--made me smile. Although the situation is different, it somewhat reminds me of the time my boyfriend and I went on a quest for orange Fanta, simply because it was delicious and so very good when mixed with coke.

Congrats on the DD, this is an amazing piece. ^_^
ChloePants Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
I feel exactly like this except it's music instead of soda. What a wonderful poem. I really like it. The pacing, rhythm, everything. I love it all and the fondness - and hatred - it recalls. Beautiful. Congrats on the DD.
symphonyofmadness Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
Whether you write once in a year or once every 5 minutes, keep doing whatever it is you're doing. This was brilliant :heart:
Congrats on the DD =]
batousaijin Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2007
That's a great poem. It captures a moment in time. I like the symbolism about drinking someone else's favorite soda to have a piece of them inside you.
i like it
Penslinger Featured By Owner Jan 23, 2007
Really great.
sillydru Featured By Owner Jan 22, 2007
It's so very you, or at least what I remember of you.

Strange, simply because I was speaking of you exactly a week ago and wondering what had become of the bard.
shaunathanblaze Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2007
i love the simplistic idea behind this and it's funny cause i have been in the exact situation. great idea and very well expressed

as for the title maybe something with the word carbonated in it?

kaujot Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2007
Agreed, but I don't really dig on the title. It seems almost too much for this.
altruisticlies Featured By Owner Jan 15, 2007
What's a better one? I hate it too.
imperfect Featured By Owner Jan 18, 2007  Hobbyist Writer
but it also means
lengleng Featured By Owner Jan 14, 2007
what a poem, seriously.
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